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Termination Shock by Neal Stephenson (2021) (read in 2022)

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Standard disclaimer[1]

 As usual in a Neal Stephenson book, there’s a lot going on. As usual in a Stephenson book of late, every single last character is possessed of a unique and ostensibly fascinating background, is confident, self-sufficient and self-reliant, interesting, eloquent, funny, smart, skilled, and almost invariably independently wealthy. Does that take a wee bit of the tension out of the book? You betcha.

There is the constant undertone that people who are not like the characters are guilty of having personally failed to be that awesome through not trying hard enough. Stephenson likes guns, libertarianism, and using ten words where one would suffice—my guess would be that he likes them in that order.

We meet Rufus Grant, a part-Comanche, mostly black ex-Army soldier-turned-rancher/drone-expert who’d lost his wife and child to a giant wild boar whose species had gotten a massive upwind in the plains of Texas because of the horrific and ongoing effects of climate change. We learn a lot about guns, wild boars, and Texas geography with Rufus. It’s not uninteresting, but it is a pretty long prologue to the action that is coming.

The action is a confluence of Rufus finally getting a shot at his arch-nemesis—a nearly unbelievably and unprecedentedly large wild boar named Snout—and Saskia and co. attempting to land their plane onto the same airstrip where Snout’s herd is running for its life. Who is Saskia? She is the Queen of the Netherlands, flying her own plane on a secret mission to meet up with billionaire T.R. Schmidt, the Lord Mayor of London, a billionaire from Singapore, extremely old money from Venice, and all of their associated partners, who are all incredibly gifted, fabulously intelligent, and breathtakingly attractive.

They are there to witness T.R.‘s opening ceremony for his geoengineering gun called Pina2bo, which boosts drones full of sulfur into the upper stratosphere in a continuous loop, with the drones falling back to Earth, flying home, being refilled with sulfur, and, finally, going for another ride into the upper atmosphere. Basically, Stephenson loves guns so much that he wrote an entire book about the biggest one he could think of.

There’s an entire second plot—perhaps ¼ of the book—about Deep “Laks” Singh, a Punjab-Canadian Sikh who is an absolute master of gatka, a fighting style unique to the Punjab region. When he gets to India, he’s so amazing at it that he’s better than anyone there—because he tried harder? It takes him a bit of western-guy-traveling-in-the-Global-South to get to what’s called the Line of Actual Control (LAC) (Wikipedia), which is kind of a weapons-free area along the border between China and India where skirmishes between Fortnite-like clans are allowed but nothing else. This is all filmed by drones and broadcast live on social media, with all of the attendant bullshit you would expect.

Saskia abdicates her throne to her daughter for reasons I can no longer remember, but her daughter is a thrilling millennial, to whom Saskia at least partially kowtows for being even more amazing she is. That’s OK, though, because Saskia’s now got one of Italy’s richest men chasing her tight tail and also the Saudis are giving her super-expensive hydrogen-fueled airplanes, so she’s jetting all over the world, supported by the governments who whole-heartedly approve of the kind of weather that seems to have been propagated by the initial attempts at geoengineering, but who the fuck knows because it’s just a bunch of rich guys blowing chemicals into the atmosphere and claiming that they fixed the climate crisis, but are really looking for an angle through which to make more money, a usual, which is wholly unscientific, but is absolutely the libertarian wet dream, because that’s the only way that anything ever gets done because government sucks, ammrite?

After the Chinese blow him off a mountaintop with a sound ray and he spends months convalescing and learning how to use the high-tech enhancements installed by top-flight Indian surgeons, Laks ends up working for the Indian government, which is none too thrilled about the side-effects of Pina2bo, which it blames for the late monsoon season. So they send him back to Vancouver to infiltrate the U.S. border, make his way to Texas, and take out Pina2bo. He does this with no small amount of success, though he is eventually blocked and felled by Rufus and a crew of eagle-trainers. I honestly feel like I could just type anything here and it would be just as believable as what actually happened in the book.

This is a one-sided book about how awesome it would be if billionaires, responsible for nearly every awesome thing about out lives already, were to just go ahead and fix the climate crisis with a bit of geoengineering, because government isn’t going to do it.

I wrote notes to myself several times expressing amazement that I was 400, then 500, then 700 pages deep into the book without yet having pushed up against any awareness that there might be some nuance to the question of geoengineering. You do you, Neal, but this is just stupid-porn for techno-fabulists who believe that there’s a straightforward technical solution to every problem that simply involves capital making more capital and definitely doesn’t involve any reduction or restriction of consumption and, furthermore, doesn’t involve dealing with the disgusting 99.9% of humanity who aren’t extraordinarily rich or privileged by exactly the system that led the planet into this cul de sac in the first place. The only time we hear about anyone who might be opposed is in the third person to let us all know that they’re naive babies who hate progress and billionaires.

Another thing that we barely ever hear about in this book is the United States. Without any explanation, it’s just a complete non-entity in the future. There is neither hide nor hair of the oppressive U.S. Russia goes unmentioned. Africa and South America are, of course, absent. Only Europe and China figure into the future. The U.S. is represented by a world-saving billionaire, a toothless FAA and Rufus. The first—and pretty much only—mention of the United States is in the following passage, a throwaway comment that states without explaining.

“The United States—which used to intervene in such situations—was a basket case and global laughingstock;”
Page 518

For a guy who can write an entire chapter on how Laks combs his hair, that this guy couldn’t figure out how to say anything about how the United States is just not credible. I bet he’s saving it for the third 800-page installment.

“T.R.’s phone had buzzed, and he had put on reading glasses. He looked at Willem over the lenses. “My granddad built a mine in Cuba. Castro took it away from him. Does that mean he shouldn’t have built it?” While Willem pondered this not uninteresting philosophical conundrum, […]”
Page 552

See what I mean? Absolutely nuance-free. It is not an interesting philosophical conundrum. It’s bullshit for Stephenson to make the over-educated Willem think that it is. It is the same bullshit rich people always tell the world every chance they get. They want to convince everyone that they are rich because the world has rewarded them for being special—intelligent or driven or clever or wise—rather than for being lucky or privileged.

“The initial pushback against what T.R. was doing here had more recently been muted by countervailing arguments around the idea of termination shock: the fear that if the gun stopped, it would lead to a backlash in the world’s climate system.”
Page 586

And here he finally tells us what termination shock is: it means that all you have to do is be first and then no-one can stop you because stopping you would break things more than if you’d never started. So, you get some facts on the ground and convince people “termination shock” is a thing so they’re afraid of trying to stop you. Might everything have been less fucked had no-one started geoengineering? Perhaps…but the beauty is that from where we are now (post-geoengineering), the best course of action is to continue geoengineering. Neat, right?

““It’s like, we’ve been in a car with a brick on the gas pedal and no one at the wheel, careening down the road, running over people and crashing into things. We’re still in the car. We can’t get out of the car. But someone could at least grab the wheel. T.R. ain’t the perfect man to grab it, but I don’t think his whole plan is just to fuck up the Punjab and starve India.”
Page 655

Let’s pretend that that’s not a stupid analogy (because we don’t need someone to grab the wheel; we need to take our foot off the gas). Let’s pretend it’s an alluring argument. OK. An accident people can live with. Once there’s a driver, they’re going to get blamed. Hiccups cost dozens of millions of lives. “Oops” and “we’re still figuring it out” and “they were going to die anyway” and “we have to do something” don’t cut the mustard. Whoever’s driving—when they’re wrong, they will have wasted time and resources making things worse. They don’t consider that for a second in this book.

A better analogy for this book is: 100 people in a cave with supplies. Two take half of the supplies to go on a mission to find help. If they just decide on their own, is that right?

This is Stephenson’s Atlas Shrugged. It’s a fantasy about those all-powerful greens and animals-rights activists getting their comeuppance at the hands of underdog billionaires. These are the kind of people libertarians and objectivists choose to write about. It’s billionaire fan-fic.

To be fair, and very rarely, an interesting insight sneak in.

“[…] they controlled a trillion dollars that had been earned by injecting carbon dioxide into the atmosphere.”
Page 512

That’s kind of a nice way of putting it. They created a tremendous amount of value while they were doing it, but they also knew most of the time that they were doing a lot of damage that was going to be very difficult to repair. The most important thing quickly became continued personal enrichment. Any costs that could be externalized, were—regardless of morality or ethics. They, as usual, didn’t enter into it.

“The first wave is a stopgap measure. Hurling enough SO2 into the stratosphere to begin making a difference. All well and good; when a house is on fire, you throw water on it. The second wave will be about tuning the distribution of the veil so as to achieve the results . . .” Saskia looked him in the eye. She got the idea he was about to conclude the sentence with “we want” but after the briefest of hesitations he said “that are most beneficial.””
Page 527

Basically, the 99% have always been exploited and have little to no power. In arrogating power to themselves, a wealthy elite have started destroying the planet. No-one else had a say as they did so. Once the elite realized that they’d broken things, they doubled down because that’s how they stayed wealthy and powerful. Now that they also feel threatened, they will, once again, and autocratically, do what they want to protect their interests, all without so much as a by-your-leave from the long-suffering masses. It may be the only way forward for a benighted and congenitally vicious species, but it’s not a democracy. Stop pretending that it is. People just have dictators they like and those they don’t like. Like sports teams But most people like dictators. Most pick a side.

I’ve read nearly everything he’s written so far—Seveneves in 2016, Reamde in 2014, Anathem in 2010, Cobweb in 2007, The System of the World in 2006, Confusion in 2005, Confusion in 2004, The System of the World in 2003, Cryptonomicon in 2002[2], and, finally, Diamond Age and the legendary Snow Crash sometime … even longer ago, long before I was keeping track of books I’ve read or doing anything as elaborate as keeping notes about them.

This is probably the last book I’ll read by Neal Stephenson for all of the reasons outlined above and noted in detail in witty ripostes to citations below. This is nothing more than a ridiculously long airport thriller. I have to admit I was speed-reading some sections. It’s a 700-page setup for a sequel. The hubris is mind-boggling.


[1] Disclaimer: these are notes I took while reading this book. They include citations I found interesting or enlightening or particularly well-written. In some cases, I’ve pointed out which of these applies to which citation; in others, I have not. Any benefit you gain from reading these notes is purely incidental to the purpose they serve of reminding me of what I once read. Please see Wikipedia for a summary if I’ve failed to provide one sufficient for your purposes. If my notes serve to trigger an interest in this book, then I’m happy for you.

Citations

“During that time there was surprisingly little to do. She and Johan had trimmed the plane so that its weight exceeded the lift produced by its wings; in accordance with the laws of physics, this caused it to lose altitude in a steady and predictable manner.”
Page 5

What the fuck kind of boring shit is this? No wonder this book is 700 pages long. I mean, this reads like it was written by ChatGPT. Neal, are you cheating? Or have you really become this pedantic and boring?

“The man began to unlimber his Kalashnikov but then there was a bang that made the queen go deaf in one ear. She looked up at Amelia in time to see her discharge a second round at the pig. The pig fell over and stopped moving, apart from some jerky nervous system mayhem about the legs. The man turned half around and favored Amelia with a nod. “Double tap was definitely your correct move, sister,” he remarked in a world-weary but agreeable tone, and once again turned his back on them.”
Page 12

This is awful writing, akin to that horseshit survivalist book I read from Gary once. I’m surprised I didn’t have to read about the exact caliber and number of shells.

“For years he’d been hunting Snout all over Texas. Now he knew almost exactly where the creature was. It could only move so fast. He and his herd would leave in their wake a wide trail of shit and damage; it would be as easy as tracking an armored division across a golf course.”
Page 37
“Amelia was able to produce from her bag a pair of ordinary (not electronically enhanced) sunglasses with an old-school military look to them. Fenna unfolded them and slipped them onto Saskia’s face, carefully guiding the ends of the bows into the tight gap between her temples and the spandex hood.”
Page 50

For the love of God, was there no editor on this book. This is a nearly autistic level of detail.

“Fenna was braless, wiry, and heavily tattooed, so any lurkers watching from the scrub along the banks would have seen more, but not for long.”
Page 51

WT-actual-F Neal. Are you thirteen years old?

“Fat orange and yellow extension cords coursed over the sand, obliging her to pick her feet up as she walked.”
Page 56

Why would you write that? This is terrible. Are we supposed to think that she doesn’t pick up her feet in the normal course of things? Is she high-stepping? Does it matter? Will these cables be relevant? Spoiler alert: they would not.

“Could anything less sustainable be imagined? She was drinking water from a bottle made of petrochemicals. At three in the morning the temperature was still so high that humans could not sleep unless they ran air conditioners powered by generators that burned more petroleum. The generators and the air conditioners alike dumped more heat into the air.”
Page 57
“Rufus, of course, knew her only as Saskia, and had introduced her as such to all of the Boskeys. It was a code name; but at the same time she felt in some ways that it was her true name, and she very much enjoyed being called it.”
Page 59

I only cited a tiny bit here; this is the end of a chapter-length treatise on her name. Jesus.

“The next, and last, time that Hendrik saw his father, Johannes was kneeling naked in the town square. He was blindfolded. On closer inspection, he was bandaged over the eye sockets, and the bandage was soaked and streaming with blood, because his eyes had been gouged out and tossed into a bucket along with a lot of other eyes of the wrong color. One of the young rebels had got a samurai sword and was going down the line cutting heads off. Johannes’s last words were “Leve de Koningin!” (“Long live the Queen!”).”
Page 79
“They drank. Of course, they would hold the entire conversation in Dutch. “She sends this,” Willem said, and slid the queen’s note across the table. Hendrik somewhat laboriously fished out glasses and put them on, then unfolded the note and read it, as if it were an everyday occurrence for him to sit out in his gazebo perusing correspondence from crowned heads of Europe.”
Page 85

This feels so awkward. He’s trying so hard to emphasize how cool his characters are. I’m afraid to go back to the Baroque Cycle or Cryptonomicon to discover that he’s always been like this.

“The Mississippi was about seven Rhines. When this spillway was wide open, it diverted two and a half Rhines into the lake.”
Page 96
“Now, where Willem came from, a Rhine was sort of a big deal. A third of the Netherlands’ economy passed up and down one single Rhine. They had, in effect, built a whole country around it. Here, though, people were gunning their pickup trucks over a causeway bestriding two and a half Rhines just as a temporary diversion of a seven-Rhine river over yonder. It was one of those insane statistics about the scale of America that had once made the United States seem like an omnipotent hyperpower and now made it seem like a beached whale.”
Page 96
“Willem glanced toward the adjoining high-rise district, sprouting from a low clutter of RVs and tents. “You’re right,” he said, “that is not a choice we have to make. Oh, fisheries are always problematic in all countries. But when we build coastal defenses, as a rule, we are creating jobs. Not obliterating valuable sources of employment.””
Page 100

Nice lecture, Neal. What happened to you?

“Then Willem almost got them killed when he failed to notice stopped traffic on the highway ahead until it was nearly too late and had to stand on the brakes and make a controlled diversion onto the shoulder.”
Page 122

WTF? He has a meter-precise virus-detection app, but personal vehicles no longer have radar and auto-braking?

“Saskia knew she’d looked to the example of Prince Harry and his American wife, Meghan, who had simply walked away, renounced their titles, and moved to the West Coast to live like normal humans.”
Page 128

FFS. They’re living like normal multimillionaires who will never want for anything, not like “normal humans”.

“This place, however, was about permanence. Permanence, and uniqueness. Every detail custom-built of polished old wood, wrought iron, sculpted marble. Original works of art wherever some decoration was wanted, living flowers arranged by human hands. That human effort immanent in every detail. Napkins folded just so, drinks hand-shaken and served with origami twists of citrus rind. People were expensive; the way to display, or to enjoy, great wealth was to build an environment that could only have been wrought, and could only be sustained from one hour to the next, by unceasing human effort. Saskia, with her staff, was as guilty of it as anyone, but she tended to forget about it until some event such as the journey down the Brazos reset her thinking.”
Page 145
“That kind of thinking—adjust the climate of the entire planet just to make things good for Venice—might have been very typical of Venice in, say, the twelfth century but was not what one expected today.”
Page 151

But we’ve already done exactly that: adjusted the climate of the world so that an elite could live extravagant lives.

““The size of it. The sheer amount of steel in the ground. The engineering. The presence, Your Majesty, the physical mass and reality of it. Every strand of rebar was drawn out in a steel mill. Where’d the heat come from? Burning things. The cement was produced in kilns, biggest things you ever seen. How do we keep the kilns hot? Burning things. We put the steel and the concrete together to make these things, these freeway interchanges, just so cars can run on ’em. How do we keep the cars moving? Burning things.””
Page 161

It is incredible and grotesque. A spectacular waste of resources immiserating mankind for the benefit of a few.

““With all due respect, Your Majesty, it is as sustainable, or as unsustainable, as your whole country.”
Page 162

It is literally making her country unsustainable. This is hogwash of the kind that Americans eat up. It feels true.

“As he said it, the twenty-six lanes of the Katy Freeway suddenly filled up with cars and trucks, countless thousands of them, moving along at moderate speed—not quite a traffic jam, but still with enough brake lights igniting here and there to temper the flow.”
Page 162

Those thousands could all fit into two trains in that public-transport video, Why Roads ALWAYS Fill Up, No Matter How Much We Widen Them by Adam Something (YouTube).

“Standing at his side was his wife, Dr. Daia Kaur Chand, smartly but not flashily attired in pants and flats well adapted to a daylong program of clambering in and out of diverse vehicles.”
Page 169

So superfluous.

“[…] she astonished and delighted their hosts by greeting them in a language that Saskia had to presume was Punjabi. Mohinder and his family didn’t have a Willem on staff to do advance research on everyone they were going to encounter over the course of a day and so it was a joyous surprise to them to discover that one of their guests shared their religion and spoke their language.”
Page 169

So. Many. Words.

“These guys did look happy. A little older, whiter, maler, and squarer than techies in Sunnyvale or Amsterdam. Calmly, even serenely focused on what they were doing.”
Page 179

Like Uster 😜.

““Nope, water runs right through it,” T.R. said. He took a step back, extended his arms, and gave it the full Ozymandias.

““Sulfur!” he proclaimed, in the same tone that a conquistador might have said “Gold!”

““The stone that burns!”

“Then he added, “S!,” which Saskia knew was an allusion to its symbol on the periodic table.”

Page 181

Was this book written by a committee? Also, water runs right through it, but what about wind? Didn’t they just have a hurricane? Why is it in such a neat pile? In a normal sci-fi book, I wouldn’t ask, but Stephenson makes such an effort to make you hyper-aware of how much research he’s done, that it awakes the pedant in me.

“Saskia knew the term at least as well as Bob. She was slower to respond, though, since she had been trained to think hard and choose her words carefully when any topic related to the Second World War came up in conversation.”
Page 186

These constant ham-handed and tediously literal reminders of how smart people manage to look smart. This could have been, “Saskia took her time in answering…”

““You can buy that much sulfur for fifteen million dollars!?” Saskia was suddenly having to restrain an irrational urge to run out and buy a sulfur pile of her own.”
Page 202

I know she’s a queen. But please stop writing about the purchasing power of the wealthy so veneratively.

“He nodded. “Currently, further work on the project is blocked because it was found to be in violation of the European Directive on Birds.”

““Excuse me, did you say birds?”

““Yes.” Michiel gave a shy, wry smile. “That is only one such violation, to tell you the truth. Also, the construction of the MOSE sea gates disturbed aquatic life on the bottom of the Lagoon. Mussel populations were impacted across several hectares. Every time such a violation is found to have happened, it triggers the European Infraction Procedure.””

Page 209

I see what he’s suggesting here, but it’s honestly ignoring shit like this (the environment) that got us into this mess in the first place (climate crisis).

““If folks all over the world are going to get riled up at billionaires messing with the climate even when we are not really doing a goddamn thing, then we got no real downside politically.””
Page 222

True, if self-serving.

““Even if we could get China and India to stop burning shit tomorrow, and crash their economies for the sake of Mother Earth,” T.R. said, “it wouldn’t undo what we’ve done, as a civilization, to the atmosphere since we first worked out how to turn fossil fuel into work.””
Page 223

Once again, utterly failing to recognize his own country’s still-massive per-capita output and its massive contribution to that historical CO2 debt.

“Hell, in Afghanistan they even burn shit.”
Page 224

Lots of places burn dung. Is this T.R.‘s blinkered view or the author’s? The authorial style nearly forces me to wonder these things.

““You’re saying that removing the carbon from the atmosphere would be a much bigger project than putting sulfur into it,” Saskia said. “We would have to make a pile of carbon the size of Mount Rainier. About thirty cubic miles. Imagine a cube a mile on a side, full of this stuff.” He rested his hand a little more gently on the carbon jar. “And now imagine thirty of those. To get that done in any reasonable amount of time—let’s say fifty years—you have to imagine a 747 cargo freighter loaded with pure elemental carbon dumping it onto the pile every nine seconds for fifty years, 24/7/365,””
Page 225
““The Greens,” Saskia said, “idolize nature and will want to say that if drought or deluge happens in Mali or Nebraska or Uttar Pradesh because of their carbon-sequestering forest, why, that is nature’s decree. Gaia’s just verdict. We must bow to it. But try telling that to the victims.””
Page 227

This is absolutely not what “The Greens” think, but OK. Nature built us a cocoon. We don’t know how to fine-tune it. We have only succeeded in making things worse so far. What reason do we have to hope that whatever we do with have a salutary rather deleterious effect?

“He had shoulder-holstered his cricket bat so that its handle projected up behind his head, making him look (as he was no doubt well aware) like a character in a movie.”
Page 235

Authors today write books as if they were screenplays

““The muzzle flash’ll catch your eye,” T.R. said. “But if you look at that, you’ll miss it. Shell’s already long gone. You got to look into the space above. Next one’s in 3 . . . 2 . . . 1 . . .” Saskia just glimpsed it, moving straight up at fantastic velocity, as the muzzle flared and extinguished below.”
Page 260

Stephenson loves guns so much that he wrote an entire book about the biggest one he could think of.

““He has a gift for the catchphrase,” Saskia said. “One can easily imagine him hawking these on YouTube. Texas Gold.”

““Jumpsuit Orange, if he’s not careful.”

““I have no idea as to the legalities. Do you?””

Page 266

I don’t care who that is; almost no European would come anywhere close to using that idiom. I know people way cooler than her who wouldn’t know it, much less be able to use it.

“To extend Ilham’s analogy, if this was the Fellowship of the Ring, Laks was Aragorn, part man and part elf, equally capable of hanging out with Lord Elrond at the high table of Imladris or slamming down pints in a tavern in Bree.”
Page 276

He’s absolutely not part-elf. He’s a Numenorian. Stephenson has an almost pathological drive to heap as many cool properties onto his characters as possible, but can’t even get LOTR shit straight.

“Until recently it had been necessary to drive all the way over Rohtang Pass, an infinity of switchbacks cresting at four thousand meters, then down an equal number of switchbacks into a hamlet on the upper Chenab at more like three thousand meters. From there the highway followed a maddeningly indirect route up into Ladakh, the water- and oxygen-starved province that bordered China.”
Page 279
“They drove over a pass that topped out at fifty-four hundred meters, and stopped at the little village there to take selfies and inject cash into the local economy, such as it was. Then they descended to a somewhat more survivable altitude of four thousand,”
Page 287
““Read it,” T.R. said, cutting him off. “I get it, this is your whaling ship, a place for everything and everything in its place. You the Captain Ahab of this little operation, then?””
Page 291

Everybody in this book has read—and remembered—Moby Dick. Nobody I know has read it, but everyone in this book has. It’s a weird flex, to say the very least.

“Even bicycles were almost overkill. Huis ten Bosch was just a few thousand strides from the edge of the North Sea. They could have walked to it briskly in less than an hour. On bicycles, trailed by security and support staff in cars, they covered the distance in minutes.”
Page 301

In a windstorm. Surging hard enough to cause problems. Wind coming ashore. Headwind. No problem. You could have skipped this whole paragraph. It’s unnecessary and inaccurate.

““The cease-fire of 1962 put an end to armed conflict between India and China along their shared border—which remains disputed to this day. A peace agreement signed by Zhou Enlai and Jawaharlal Nehru referred not to the border but to the Line of Actual Control—a diplomatic phrasing that enabled the cease-fire to be formalized without either party acknowledging the other’s territorial claims.””
Page 321
““Who doesn’t like it?” Rufus asked. “Other than folks who hate geoengineering on principle?” Alastair shrugged. “Any country whose ox is gored by the knock-on effects.””
Page 354

This is not even close to nuanced. 700 pages and the only lip service paid to anyone who might be opposed is that they’re naive babies who hate progress and billionaires.

“Horseshoes and iron wheel rims clattered on the paving stones as it swept round in a wide curve—the turning radius of these things was atrocious—that took it up to the door below.”
Page 365

His pedantry is legendary. He just can’t seem to be able to help himself.

“The dressmaker was drafting along behind Fenna, like a bike racer allowing a stronger rider to break the wind.”
Page 367

Literally just defined “drafting”

“With a moment’s reflection, of course, it was clear why Ilham—who still had family in Xinjiang—would not want to become world famous doing what Big Fish’s School was doing.”
Page 399

We’re 400 pages in and neither hide nor hair of the oppressive U.S. They are represented by a world-saving billionaire, a toothless FAA and Rufus.

““I don’t care,” she said. “I’m not an environmentalist except insofar as it bears on those issues I do care about. Once we’ve gotten to the point where girls in developing countries are getting decent educations and being given control over their own bodies, then I’ll concern myself with T.R. McHooligan’s sulfur veil and its projected side effects. Maybe.””
Page 420

Stephenson speaking his politics through other characters. He’s all for freedom and letting billionaires sort things out. As if they weren’t the reason there’s anything to sort out in the first place.

“It was thus capable of servicing the very largest container ships in the world: absurdly enormous things, double the width of the biggest ship that could fit through the Panama Canal, that boggled Saskia’s mind whenever she came out here to look at them. It was the place where the economy of China made a direct umbilical connection to Europe. The ships were two dozen containers wide and drew twenty meters of water when fully loaded. Some of them, fresh in from Asia, would unload part of their burden here just so that they would ride higher in the water, making it possible for them to move on to smaller and shallower European ports.”
Page 426
“High mountains rising out of the jungle in the distance. And finally a huge hole in the ground, a spiraling roadway carved into its sloping walls, the size of it incomprehensible when you saw the motes spaced out along that road and understood that they were the largest trucks on Earth.”
Page 436
“Willem spent a few minutes comparing wait times on various ride share apps. All disastrous. Then he tried to sort out the train schedules, which had been thrown into disarray. Finally he just got on his bicycle and rode the few kilometers. He didn’t even have to pedal. The wind pushed him there.”
Page 438

How do you not just take the bike in the first place? 5km is 12 minutes at a reasonable pace. He probably pissed away longer than that on the ride-share apps. None of which involve sharing rides anyway.

“What does all this mean for China? It means that they can go on fueling their economy with coal and suppress its nastier side effects with geoengineering schemes of their own, while enjoying political cover from several countries in the West that might otherwise have raised a fuss. Good value for the money, if you ask me.””
Page 455

China is reducing their use of coal faster than any other country, but don’t let that get in the way of your jingoistic fantasy that all countries are as immoral as the U.S. , which is still suspiciously absent from this whole story.

“The next he was looking a hundred kilometers into China.”
Page 457
“She finally became aware that all attention was focused on her. She tried to say something but couldn’t get it out. Instead she flicked her fingers over the surface of her tablet and spun it around so that everyone could see it.”
Page 466

I just don’t understand how it’s the future and they no longer have AirPlay.

““Nice enough afternoon,” he said. “Can I borrow a bicycle?””
Page 469

You rode one there that morning, no?

“The Schiphol project had been shitcanned partly because of protests from animal rights activists. Such people were, to put it mildly, neither common nor welcome on the Flying S, or any other West Texas, ranch.”
Page 473

This is Stephenson’s Atlas Shrugged. It’s a fantasy about those all-powerful greens and animals-rights activists getting their comeuppance at the hands of underdog billionaires.

“And she was said to be as fluent in Punjabi as she was in English.”
Page 495

Neal has forgotten that he’d already bragged about this on her introduction.

“And Marco had brought with him his friend Pau, an activist from Barcelona—a city that, like Venice, was trying to get free of the country it had been lumped into.”
Page 496

Don’t hold back, fuckwit. Sure, just let any rich enclave excise itself from the mass of poors around it, who obviously had nothing to do with anyone’s success.

“The most prominent work on display was a Renaissance painting of Ceres in her winged chariot. The very goddess after whom cereals were named. She was flying over an idealized Tuscan landscape looking for her lost daughter Proserpina. Saskia knew the story perfectly well.”
Page 496

Of course she knew that story. I’d never heard of it, but I’m a benighted peasant, not a queen.

““In the scenario where Pina2bo is the only site of stratospheric sulfur injection in the whole world,” Michiel said, “and it runs at maximum capacity year-round, maybe that is the case. That is why we are bringing Vadan online later this year. And it’s why T.R. has begun work on Papua. Which adds a site in the Southern Hemisphere.” “How does that help us?” “Historically, volcanic eruptions south of the equator are associated with stronger monsoons.””
Page 497

I keep waiting for the shoe to drop, but I don’t sense any realistic concern about hubris coming anytime soon. They are all straight-faced about the utter predictability of targeted geoengineering.

“And the great and small powers of the world will have to mark them out on their chessboards and maybe even prepare for conflict. But if you suppose any of that is new, you don’t know history.””
Page 500

So no revolution, but the same elites in control. A breathtaking arrogance, but not unexpected.

“Once they were established in that waterfront bar with glasses of white wine and a plate of snails, Michiel squinted across the sun-sparkled water of the cove toward the fuel dock, then pulled his sunglasses down on his nose, looked over them at Saskia, and said, “Those men are fascinated by your Beaver. As am I.””
Page 502

Bin ich im falschen Film? This is a romance novel. And a poorly written one at that.

“[…] they controlled a trillion dollars that had been earned by injecting carbon dioxide into the atmosphere.”
Page 512

That’s kind of a nice way of putting it. They created a tremendous amount of value while they were doing it, but they also knew most of the time that they were also doing a lot of damage that was going to be very difficult to repair. The most important thing quickly became continued personal enrichment. Any costs that could be externalized, were. Regardless of morality or ethics. They didn’t enter into it.

““Absolutely. I crashed that plane to be sure.”

“Alastair raised an eyebrow. “Some would blame the pigs.”

““Or the alligator that chased the pigs. Or the refugees who chased the alligator. Or the fire ants that burned out the relays in their air conditioners. You can go on spreading the blame as far as you like. But I was flying the plane. The buck stops at the pilot’s chair.”

““Formally, it was your responsibility,” Alastair agreed. “And yet at some level you feel that the universe owes you a free jet airplane.”

““I’d never come out and say it like that. But yes.””

Page 516
“The United States—which used to intervene in such situations—was a basket case and global laughingstock;”
Page 518

Literally the first time he’s mentioned the U.S.

“Saskia had to suppress an impulse to confess that she no longer had “people” in that sense of the term. She was meaning to get some sooner or later. She could support a modest staff. But, for now, she was still enjoying the simplicity and freedom of not being anyone’s boss.”
Page 520

These are the kind of people libertarians and objectivists choose to write about. It’s billionaire fan-fic.

“A good many of those huge container ships were, she knew, bound to or from Maasvlakte, the only port capable of accommodating them.”
Page 522

Hasn’t Rotterdam just been destroyed? No effect on shipping? This is incoherent. And remember, Neal, your pedantry made me read you like this.

“Fahd made a faint grimace and tossed one hand as if shooing something away. “We are buying what they are selling, no more,” he said. “Chinese aid comes at a high price—a price we don’t need to pay.””
Page 524

JFC Neal.

“The first wave is a stopgap measure. Hurling enough SO2 into the stratosphere to begin making a difference. All well and good; when a house is on fire, you throw water on it. The second wave will be about tuning the distribution of the veil so as to achieve the results . . .” Saskia looked him in the eye. She got the idea he was about to conclude the sentence with “we want” but after the briefest of hesitations he said “that are most beneficial.””
Page 527

Basically, the 99% have always been exploited and have little to no power. In arrogating power to themselves, a wealthy elite have started destroying the planet. No-one else had a say as they did so. Once the elite realized that they’d broken things, they doubled down because that’s how they stayed wealthy and powerful. Now that they also feel threatened, they will, once again, and autocratically, do what they want to protect their interests, all without so much as a by your leave from the long-suffering masses. It may be the only way forward for a benighted and congenitally vicious species, but it’s not a democracy. Stop pretending that it is. People just have dictators they like and those they don’t like. Like sports teams But most people like dictators. Most pick a side.

“Saskia peeked over the shoulder of a man with close-cropped, sandy hair and a deeply tanned neck as he fluidly worked his way through the user interface of a coffee machine. By the time he had finished, she had an idea what to do, and without too much floundering was able to get away with a decent enough macchiato.”
Page 527

What a waste of text. Who the fuck cares what that guy looks like? You could have just written: Saskia got a cup of coffee. Or not. Who cares if she has coffee?

“But having seen shit you wouldn’t believe in Indonesia, he had arrived at the conclusion that political stability anywhere was an illusion that only a simpleton would believe in. That (invoking, here, a version of the anthropic principle) such simpletons only believed they were right when and if they just happened to live in places that were temporarily stable. And that it was better to live somewhere obviously dangerous, because it kept you on your toes. Willem had thought all this daft until Trump and QAnon.”
Page 534

Ya know, ya started strong. The U.S. has always been crazy and mean for those who paid attention.

“His Green instincts, drilled into him by a life spent in a modern Western social democracy, told him to be outraged by what the miners had done to this part of the planet. But he knew that every wind turbine feeding green electricity into the Netherlands’ grid had copper windings in its generator and copper cables connecting it to the system. And that the copper had come from here.”
Page 545
“Not for the first time, Willem was awed, staggered, and even a little humiliated by the sheer scale at which the oil and mining industries operated—year in, year out, in a way that was basically invisible to the people on the other side of the world who benefited from what they were doing, and who funded these works, every time they checked their Twitter.”
Page 549
“Bad things tend to be localized in time and space. Harder to predict. But we can predict them to some extent. And the more sites we have operational, the more knobs and levers we have on the dashboard, so to speak. So instead of just blundering around we are managing the situation to maximize the good and minimize the bad.””
Page 551

550 pages in and still on the same track. No awareness that there might be some nuance to it. This is nothing more than a ridiculously long airport thriller. I have to admit I’m speed-reading some sections now.

“T.R.’s phone had buzzed, and he had put on reading glasses. He looked at Willem over the lenses. “My granddad built a mine in Cuba. Castro took it away from him. Does that mean he shouldn’t have built it?” While Willem pondered this not uninteresting philosophical conundrum, […]”
Page 552

Jfc. Absolutely nuance-free. It is not an interesting philosophical conundrum. It is the same bullshit rich people always tell the world whenever they get a chance. They want to convince everyone that they are rich because the world has rewarded them for being special—intelligent or driven or clever or wise—rather than for being lucky.

““that it is just what people want of us. They want us to follow orders and put ourselves in harm’s way. On their behalf. ‘Oh look, those weirdos turn out to be useful to have around.’ We are useful, in other words, for going to the front lines and getting killed. So they are happy to overlook the turbans and so on.””
Page 559
“There had been no drones shadowing him in Canada, but apparently the United States was a different story. It was, as all the world knew, a completely insane and out-of-hand country, unable to control itself. Men like the Texan could get away with anything;”
Page 572
“He opened up his bag and found basic toiletries, including a small wooden comb. Traditionally this would have been tucked into his hair, but the circumstances of the wet suit and so on had not allowed it. He used this to comb out the hair that was still long and to remove strands that had naturally broken or fallen out.”
Page 575

An entire paragraph about how combing hair works. I’m dumbfounded.

I stand corrected. It would go on for multiple paragraphs.

““Yes,” Bo said, waving away Willem’s annoying cavils. “Now the situation seems quite out of hand. Copper prices have spiked, threatening our economic interests. There is also concern that shipments of coal and iron ore from Australia may be threatened. In the old days we might have looked to the United States or Great Britain to intervene. But those days are behind us, I think you’ll agree.””
Page 580

Subtly suggesting that the reason for intervention is after something has gone wrong rather than to simply take things over to get them cheaper or free.

“The initial pushback against what T.R. was doing here had more recently been muted by countervailing arguments around the idea of termination shock: the fear that if the gun stopped, it would lead to a backlash in the world’s climate system.”
Page 586

Get facts on the ground and convince people “termination shock” is a thing so they’re afraid of trying to stop you.

“The guy with the Bug-Solv in his eyes had got to his knees. To his credit he was still observing correct trigger discipline; his cocked revolver was pointed straight up and his finger was laid alongside the cylinder. He had his face buried in the crook of his other arm. He lifted his head. If it made sense to describe a motion of the eyelids as violent, then he was blinking violently. He was trying to see something.”
Page 592

This is but a small sample of the logorrhea of this eight-page description of a fight. It’s not exciting. It’s boring. It’s like reading a technical report. No tension.

“Conor, displaying admirably good knees and leg muscles, stood straight up and looked through the mesh wall of the lift,”
Page 645

It’s just pathological at this point. Conor is a tech, an incidental character. I. Do. Not. Care. How good he is at standing up. Does anyone?

““We are at war,” Rufus said. “Gonna ride to the sound of the guns. Leaving before daybreak, I reckon.”

““The guns aren’t making any sound!” Carmelita objected. Rufus sighed.

““It is a Civil War joke. Not so funny apparently. It means I need to go to where the action is gonna be. Pina2bo.””

Page 651

Lovely initial line, ruined by over-explaining it. I guess he saved me the trouble of looking it up.

““It’s like, we’ve been in a car with a brick on the gas pedal and no one at the wheel, careening down the road, running over people and crashing into things. We’re still in the car. We can’t get out of the car. But someone could at least grab the wheel. T.R. ain’t the perfect man to grab it, but I don’t think his whole plan is just to fuck up the Punjab and starve India.”
Page 655

An alluring argument, of course. But. An accident people can live with. Once there’s a driver, they’re going to get blamed. Hiccups cost dozens of millions of lives. “oops” and “we’re still figuring it out” and “they were going to die anyway” and “we have to do something” don’t cut the mustard. If they’re wrong, they wasted time and resources making things worse. They don’t consider that for a second in this book. 100 people in a cave with supplies. Two take half of it to go on a mission to find help. If they just decide on their own, is that right?

“By the time Laks climbed back into his six-rotor flying chariot, it had become a five-rotor flying chariot.”
Page 655

Instead of writing that “a spent pin2ubo shell had perhaps unluckily but perhaps inevitably found the drone when it couldn’t land in a net that was no longer there”, we get four or five pages of tedious explanation that ended in the sentence above.

“Piet was a rucker, meaning a practitioner of a sport that consisted of putting on a backpack loaded with weights and then covering ground on foot in open country.”
Page 661

He already told us this, too. So literal.

““They’re gonna do what’s in their national interest. Always have, always will. You think China didn’t have its eye on that copper mine before I started building a gun there? The gun was a pretext, that’s all. Does that mean I oughta do nothing? When I got the means to do something?””
Page 695

I’m losing the thread of his politics…it’s quite muddled, incoherent even.


[2] H/T to Peo for the recommendation.